Teen Poetry #7 |
Copper Lincolns Never Grace My Tips |
young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Copper Lincolns Never Grace My Tips I nibble at my finger as it bleeds; such a delicious condiment. Rows of business men pass by my outstretched palm, hungry for a wallet, though a quarter would do well enough. Their day planners do not have mercy scheduled in for today, damn their secretaries. My clothes flutter in the wind looking like a sail that has seen the most violent storms. Since my clothing has such violence gathering in its sleeves, my countenance is much subdued. I cannot stand this district anymore, maybe its time to turn out the lights. [This message has been edited by young_blood (08-01-2005 11:16 AM).] |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
will no onw reply? |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
I don't usually read this forum, but this one caught my eye, just passing by. I feel for this poem, its really a great write, I stumbled through it because im emotional. Good Write. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thank you so much. it is good to have someone finally comment on it. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
mmm. creates a very good visual. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
i got a good visual from this. short and sweet, i enjoyed this one as well "Aerials, in the sky, |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks all |
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StarryEyed3 Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 58bostonia |
ok so right now i'm reading this book about 9/11, so maybe i just have that on my mind, but this really seemed to fit with that. sorry if that was totally not your intention. anyway, i really like the visual of blood as a condiment, even if it disturbed me just a little. and i pretty much love all your work... that's all i can say "and i'll sit and wonder of every love that could have been |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks. i appreciate it. |
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