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skoolyardturtle Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 96 |
The bell shattered the silence that surrounded me it was about time to leave this place away from here away from everything the train was coming to a stop and it was my turn to get off the exits were dark there was nothing beyond the cemented platform people were already loading on to the train as i made my way to the the door she snagged my hand before i stepped through the doorway the train doors slid shut and i turned around to see her face i stood still, frozen in wordless emotion, at the sight of her the bell had shattered the silence between us once again and the train started off towards nowhere it was about time to leave this place away from here away from everything the train had come to a stop but it wasn't my turn to get off |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very well done, could see it play out as I read  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A good story telling and definitely you have a natural flair to head towards writing prose too. ~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Excellent write! You have a lot of talent. ~Alli~ |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
This is veru god, but remember to have words repeat no less then three. -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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