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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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0 posted 2005-07-16 08:28 AM



Seems like everytime i try to climb out of this hole, you suck me back in.
Is it your eyes?
No.
They captivate me, but never control me.
Is it your arms?
No.
They allure me, but I could never obey them.
Is it your smile?
No.
Your smile is gorgeous, but it fails to draw me back when I am so close to being over you.
So what is it?
I know. But you haven't an idea.
What about you could stop me dead in my tracks, make even my subconcious forget to breathe?
What possibly power could you hold over me? Ah...yes.
The thought of being with you, being yours, inhabits every fiber of my being. It holds me like bars of a jail cell. I cannot escape, no matter how hard I try nor how long I work at it.

However many other guys I might kiss, or hug, or flirt with, in the end, means nothing. Because the thought of being yours, feeling my hand enclosed in yours once again, feeling your lips upon mine, is a thought almost more than I can bear.

I want you to be mine, once and for all.
And that's what draws me back.

That is the sole purpose of my existence here, I am convinced of this.
I gave you up stupidly, but I was just a child.
Now we know our mistakes, we both do.
I've admitted it. Why can't you?

Leave her for me, you can see in her eyes, she is unfaithful, and you can see in mine that i would never be.
I love you too much.

And the thought of that will bring me back to you, if ever I should stray away.
But if I were yours again,
I could swear I never would.

I cant believe how long i waited
for the boy to turn into my man...

Now if i could figure out, if it was worth the wait.

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1 posted 2005-07-16 12:07 PM


THis is good. It needs a little work, but it's a good message.

-Smile, it's not a sin.

tearsoflove13762
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2 posted 2005-07-16 11:11 PM


omg i love your poetry even more every time i read it... wow

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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3 posted 2005-07-17 03:51 PM


Thank you! I love reading replies from you all. Any ideas or thoughts on how I could fix anything in it?

<3

I cant believe how long i waited
for the boy to turn into my man...

Now if i could figure out, if it was worth the wait.

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with you
4 posted 2005-07-18 01:25 AM


"Leave her for me, you can see in her eyes, she is unfaithful, and you can see in mine that i would never be.
I love you too much."

I would have ended it there...
that last bit just is too much...



liked this one a lot..just would have ended it there..

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