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* shining star*
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since 2005-06-29
Posts 76
PA,USA

0 posted 2005-07-03 11:14 PM


I don't want to talk,
about how you secretly killed my heart.
I don't want to talk,
about how you never talked to me.
I don't want to talk,
about you never called.
I don't want to talk,
about how you don't care.
I don't want to talk,
about why and when we broke up.

I hate how you walk.
I hate how you look at me.
I hate how you dress.
I hate how you you do the same thing everday.
I hate how you thought I was stupid.
I hate how you never see me for me.

If I don't want to talk about you,
then why do I keep thinking about you.
How even though I hate you,
I still secretly love you.
And even though I say I hate you,
I hate even more that you don't love me.


© Copyright 2005 Bobbi - All Rights Reserved
spaz02
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since 2005-06-28
Posts 74
USA
1 posted 2005-07-04 02:23 PM


umm...i think this needs alot of work. i personally think it kinda repeats a movie i once seen "10 things I hate about you" ummm...i dunno it just needs some work i think
spaz02

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San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2005-07-04 05:18 PM


Ah yes, unrequited love.

It's definitely painful, but know that time doth heal and there's plenty more fish in the sea.

Good poem

javi~

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
3 posted 2005-07-05 06:31 PM


i disagree with spaz. though it is repetative its true and from the heart and i can tell that by reading it. kinda reminds me of a different version of something i recently wrote. good write tho.
SarBear
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since 2003-06-05
Posts 205
Massachusetts
4 posted 2005-07-06 08:45 PM


I think that it's good and promising but I agree with the previous poster that it is very repetitive. but it definately has a good message
~*BayBee*~
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since 2003-04-09
Posts 65
In The Clouds...
5 posted 2005-07-21 05:15 AM


I think it is good except where it starts to kind of repeat the poem from that movie... but other than that.. its good! I know we have all felt that way at one point or another!
*Holly*

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