I don't want to talk (about anything)

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Teen Poetry #7

I don't want to talk (about anything)

* shining star*
Member

since 2005-06-29

Posts 76
PA,USA

0 posted 2005-07-03 11:14 PM

I don't want to talk,
about how you secretly killed my heart.
I don't want to talk,
about how you never talked to me.
I don't want to talk,
about you never called.
I don't want to talk,
about how you don't care.
I don't want to talk,
about why and when we broke up.

I hate how you walk.
I hate how you look at me.
I hate how you dress.
I hate how you you do the same thing everday.
I hate how you thought I was stupid.
I hate how you never see me for me.

If I don't want to talk about you,
then why do I keep thinking about you.
How even though I hate you,
I still secretly love you.
And even though I say I hate you,
I hate even more that you don't love me.

spaz02
Member

since 2005-06-28

Posts 74
USA

1 posted 2005-07-04 02:23 PM

umm...i think this needs alot of work. i personally think it kinda repeats a movie i once seen "10 things I hate about you" ummm...i dunno it just needs some work i think
spaz02

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2005-07-04 05:18 PM

Ah yes, unrequited love.

It's definitely painful, but know that time doth heal and there's plenty more fish in the sea.

Good poem

javi~

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

3 posted 2005-07-05 06:31 PM

i disagree with spaz. though it is repetative its true and from the heart and i can tell that by reading it. kinda reminds me of a different version of something i recently wrote. good write tho.

SarBear
Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 205
Massachusetts

4 posted 2005-07-06 08:45 PM

I think that it's good and promising but I agree with the previous poster that it is very repetitive. but it definately has a good message

~*BayBee*~
Member

since 2003-04-09

Posts 65
In The Clouds...

5 posted 2005-07-21 05:15 AM

I think it is good except where it starts to kind of repeat the poem from that movie... but other than that.. its good! I know we have all felt that way at one point or another!
*Holly*

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