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Sweet Misery
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Sweet Misery |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
When you wake up every morning and wish it were your last Then you tumble oputta bed and wonder where you're at Is this life or is it a dream No it's just sweet misery Sweet Misery Sweet Misery I never get enough Everytime I see that blade I want to grab and cut Grab n' cut Grab n' cut I always try to stop and when I do You trigger me to do it one last time One last time One last time I shall never cut again But when you really piss me off It's all I think about Think about Think about all my tears inside and all I have to hide In my mind In my dreams Never enough Never enough Never enough of Sweet Misery "For every drop of my blood that falls is because of you" ~Spaz02~ |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
There's something about this that I really liked. Maybe it was your use of repetition but either way, I really enjoyed it. -Kelly |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts |
that's good. I like your use of repition. i would change the "oputta" bed part and make it more grammatically correct but that's all. it is really well written. |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
thanks guys...i havent posted anything new cuz i havent been home but i will try this weekend...but thank you for all your kind words.. Amber |
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