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Marshalzu
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0 posted 2005-06-15 07:36 AM


Thrust
       Into
V
e
r
t
i
c
a
l despair
       the ghostly humming
drowned in the roar
of our silence,
igniting our fears
that we have hidden so well
for so long


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1 posted 2005-06-15 09:01 PM


sounds like a break up poem...the way you wrote this gives a visual to go with the words...so sad...but done well.
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2 posted 2005-06-19 12:56 PM


exactly. the meaning is clear in this...and very visual. beautiflly written.

<3 karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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3 posted 2005-06-21 02:44 AM


Curious question:

the "l" in vertical...is that supposed to be a double meaning of the "l" on vertical and an "I" ("i". This font messes my curious question up)?

Personally, I think the format of "vertical" is a bit cliched and over-predicted (redundancy is queen), but you still give this your personal Zu-bee flavour. Cheers!

--Leah

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4 posted 2005-07-04 05:21 PM


Zu zu zu, still an ever present personality among the pippers.

nice to see an old fogey like you still posting amongst the boards.

And indeed, this poem has shown me that you have most definitely grown in your writing. Keep it up brotha, and i'll talk to you soon.

javi~

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swimming in fairy floss...........
5 posted 2005-07-10 06:59 AM


hush javvie!

how come you go all red when i press you?

as usual, a please carebare!

fall quietly...

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6 posted 2005-07-10 10:38 AM


Cute.

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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7 posted 2005-07-11 04:35 PM


Thanks for all of the wonderful replies, Cherish, Javi it's nice to see you here.
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8 posted 2005-07-12 04:52 AM


OH the shame of it all. a pleasure andy, a PLEASURE! *hides*

fall quietly...

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