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Teen Poetry #7

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Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

0 posted 2005-05-25 05:01 PM

        ... it's eyes kry out ...
    ... dying? ...

            ... evolution ...

  ...

                  ... what ever happened to ...

                    ... logik ...
      ... (sanity?) ...

                   ... nothing ever ...
                             ... made sense ...

                      ... it still craves ...

   ... ignorance ...
     ... was ...
   ... deprevity ...
     ... is ...
... bliss ...

                     ... locked eyes say nothing ...
         ... it was never exchanged ...
               ... only silence ...

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2005-05-29 01:37 AM

I'm into your work. the style is tight. the only thing that i don't like is the brackets around your titles. the two titles that i have seen have both had brackets, i think the titles a bit more stylistic variation. anyway, good job. keep perfecting your style.

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

2 posted 2005-05-29 04:26 AM

I use the bracets to help it stand out :P

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