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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2005-05-19 06:30 PM

You’re trying to smile
but it’s only for the camera
I see what you’re hiding behind that grin,
your eyes just don’t light up anymore.

You made a snow-woman in the sparse snow
desperately trying to let go
and even though it’s smiling,
this picture is bleak

the last letter said
“I can’t wait to come home”
and now this extended stay is taking it’s toll
your eyes just don’t light up anymore.

You said this weather reminded you
of when we lived on linden road
and mom’s snow-woman then
was more exquisite than yours

you told us of the giant bonfire
and how much fun it was
but standing in front of those flames
you look so cold

the last letter had more hope
and it read,
“Im coming home
and I’ll never go back”

your suffering isn’t over
because your daughter thinks
you’re leaving again
and your son doesn’t know you

and now that you’re home
your eyes are still so dim
Im sorry for the things you’ve seen
that made you this way.

(I wrote this for my brother, who just recently came back from Iraq.)

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

1 posted 2005-05-19 07:20 PM

nice
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

WranglrButts9
Member

since 2004-10-24

Posts 108
Iowa, US

2 posted 2005-05-19 10:23 PM

Very good write. I have the most respect possible for anyone that serves our country, your brother did good!

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

youcan'tseeme
Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 88

3 posted 2005-05-19 10:55 PM

First of all, I am deeply sorry that you're brother is participating in this war. It must be very difficult to endure that worry.

But secondly, you expressed your feelings very well in this poem. Honestly, at the beginning I assumed it was about a boyfriend, and then I was convinced it was directed towards your father. Since you included the fact about your brother, it made it hit even harder.

Thanks for posting
And keep writing...

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2005-05-20 12:09 PM

Wow.  I had no idea you had a brother in Iraq.  My cousin's over there right now.  I know the feeling.  *hugs*  Hopefully, with time, he'll recover that light in his eyes, and come to terms with whatever happened over there.  I won't get into my views on the war and our country's stance, however I will say that I have the utmost respect for the people who stand up to fight for this country.  For us.  I liked this poem, and can understand where your inspiration lies.  Thank him for me, Wren.  Thank him for all of us.


                    Sincerely,
                  -Richard Henry Dikeman

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

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