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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2005-05-04 10:53 AM

Feeling down,

As if I went out of bounds,

Felt like a fool,

You left me,

Without a clue,

I made up my mind,

Onward I will go,

Once again I will love,

And put on this show,

My heart might be yours,

But this moment is mine,

You will never get true love,

For you left it and me behind,

This isn't anger talking,

Just a heart's confession,

Next chance I get,

I won't mess up,

Cried many nights,

And lost many dreams,

But I won't let you down,

Take your lessons in stride,

And hold my head up high,

I see you being married,

And jogging with a carriage,

But I can't bear to know that,

So I leave you now,

With no way to reach me,

Hoping that only lessons

Can teach me,

To love someone again,

More than just a friend.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-05-04 02:39 PM

"
My heart might be yours,

But this moment is mine,

You will never get true love,

For you left it and me behind,"

know this...
very well done.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

2 posted 2005-05-04 03:01 PM

cool

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

3 posted 2005-05-07 05:42 AM

this is beautiful xeonox.... well written and so ful of emotion with flashes of imagery

Feeling down,

As if I went out of bounds,

Felt like a fool,

You left me,

Without a clue,
I made up my mind,

Onward I will go,

Once again I will love,

And put on this show,

My heart might be yours,

But this moment is mine,

You will never get true love,

For you left it and me behind,

this i relate to the most...

well done bring on more

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

4 posted 2005-05-07 08:34 PM

I liked this...not stuff i usually go for,

This isn't anger talking,

Just a heart's confession,

Next chance I get,

I won't mess up,
Enjoyed.
Thanks.

_keryn

By the way, your hands are shaking...

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2005-05-10 07:07 PM

My heart might be yours,

But this moment is mine,

You will never get true love,

For you left it and me behind,
I think we all have felt this at one time or another. It is universal in it's message.
Well done.

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

6 posted 2005-05-13 08:08 PM

to be completely honest, i sometimes hesitate from replying to your poetry just because some of it isn't my style. i read the first few lines, and i'm like wow...i don't know. it's really creative, but i don't know why i hesitate. sorry if that offends you, i honestly didn't mean it to..i'm just kind of commenting in an honest way.

i am gonna read your stuff more after this though, this was really cool, and i could relate to it. i guess lately a lot of the girls here have been on the 'boys suck' theme, and it is humbling to know that a lot of girls suck too. i'm sorry this happened to you, and sorry if i offended you in the statement above this, but i'm really glad that i read this and i hope to read more.

thanks for sharing.

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

7 posted 2005-05-13 09:45 PM

honesty does not offend me at all.

Thanks.

I do not have a common style and I know. But, I right with my heart, not with my mind..

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