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Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2003-11-04 10:53 PM

this poem is long if you read it thanks... this is kinda of like how i spend my time alone i hope you like it and make any comments for anykind that you want

I lay still for hours
depressed on my bed
trying to get these thoughts
out of my head

I start to think
I’m far away from here
and that I’m laying with
the one I hold so dear

I can feel her touch
sending shivers down my spine
But when I turn to kiss her
I remember she's no longer mine

Depression takes me once again
for I am many miles away
and if I went to see her
it couldn't be for more than a day

my blood begins to boil
and I can't control the anger inside
I'M STUCK IN THE {edit} HOME
all because someone lied

but instead of someone helping me
I suppress it because of what I might do
and all I can think is
forget life, I’m thought

I begin to think
what lead my mind to this place
and I start to think of a way out
out of here, all of it, anything just incase

I settle down
once more there is peace in my hart
just thinking, out of all of this
soon I’ll be set apart

but I’m to weak minded
and all I can do is beat myself up
that only thing that stops me is
when I feel like throwingup

I start to cry like never before
now I wish I was depressed
and when I walk out of this room
its all just going to get suppressed

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

[This message has been edited by SEA (11-06-2003 10:15 AM).]

Olive_8
Junior Member

since 2003-09-20

Posts 41
Canada

1 posted 2003-11-05 02:17 AM

I like it cause I know exactly how you feel. Watch your spelling though, it is a little choppy at times and the flow is not too great, but I am sure that you will improve, good job though!

~*Everything will be ok in the end, and if it is not ok, then it is not the end.~*

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

2 posted 2003-11-05 12:26 PM

This poem is really good, I feel your pain and it is very in depth. Depression can be one of the deepest things you can write about. Your writing is excellent because you can actually feel the depression. Good Job!

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

3 posted 2003-11-06 10:47 AM

I love this, I havent been able to write poetry for awhile, and when I do, it will turn out something like what you have here, a nice write! I might print it out and put it on my wall, just because thats how I feel everyday....
~Lisa Ann '04

"Water Over Matter"

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

4 posted 2003-11-06 12:56 PM

yes.........laying in silence.........thoughts........they never help..............good write by the way

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