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In good company |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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The first day we met, Was the day a country was free, We were happy, For our thoughts now in open, I held her in my arms, And she felt safe, She taught me how to kiss, And she became my wish, She gave me a nick name, Bunny was how I was known, I didn’t mind one bit, She never made me feel alone, We went to feed the homeless, and the ducks, we walked through the park, and gave kisses at each red light, when she wore my favorite dress, I was nothing but impressed, For Christmas I brought missile toe, Held up above, we kissed, I completed her thoughts, And she knew how I felt, We were the perfect pair, She was 4’11, but claimed to be 5, And I was small, but said medium, She loved to cuddle, And I love to huddle her on the floor, She was my princess, And I her prince, Also knows as Mr and Mrs. Buttless, Tickle me she did, Till I beg her to stop, That’s how we spent our days, In each others company. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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dodge_chick2003 Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136California |
This poem is really cute, but the rhyme scheme is off, you go to rhyming to not rhyming. It kinda threw off the flow. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I agree with dodge, but none the less poetry is how you see it, and I thought it was a great write! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
rhyming is off..but this was a personal poetry so I just let it flow. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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