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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2005-03-26 10:27 AM


Blah Blah Blah (The Sound of Romance)

What if even whispers faded
into the white noise of
our broken television?
Would you pour yourself with discretion
or let the torrents of emotion
flow through my nostrils and
suffocate.
Don't we make such a cute paradox:
my right hand grasping your left foot.
I am a lowly servant of love.

© Copyright 2005 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2005-03-30 11:42 AM


surprisingly. I don't really like this.
I can't really pin point why.
it just didn't do much for me.

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
2 posted 2005-03-30 03:15 PM


i don't like it either. i think it is cliche. i'm not sure why i wrote it or posted it. forgive me for wasting your time.
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