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Teen Poetry #7

I Won't

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

0 posted 2005-03-14 09:27 PM

I won't have
a bitter taste
in my mouth
because
of you
And I won't leave
'till you can
look me in the eye
and forget
your heart
And I won't forget
your face
or how your lips taste
when you turn
to go

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

1 posted 2005-03-14 11:20 PM

this is really cool, i love short poetry. just say what you mean...it's so much more filled with emotion to me. i also love your staggered lines. the beginning and end lines were my favorites, but all and all this is awesome..i will add it to my library. thanks =) yay for short poetry

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

2 posted 2005-03-15 12:00 PM

wow i loved it!~! No really i did im adding to my library... kinda how i have felt lately

-hold on to the one you love

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

3 posted 2005-03-15 01:11 AM

o wow, I REALLY liked this. Usually I'm all for the long rhyming poetry cause that's what I write and understand but this was an amazing piece that I can really understand. hope you don't mind if i keep this!

AIM-blueyed angel940
She's a question without answers...

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

4 posted 2005-03-15 04:40 PM

I agree with everyone above. I liked the format that you arranged it in, and the simple emotions that you conveyed. Good job, keep writing.

-Kelly

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

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