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so trivial its grotesque
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so trivial its grotesque |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
You turn your head when I go to speak. Someone turns and says: This monument was built on an alleyway and you can see the lights of philadelphia from here. The window is wide and the teacher performs math in sing song. Stick your head out into the rain, feel how it pours. We are not in California. Grass stains on my skin. We've been rolling down hills in the nude. We've been brushing my mistakes under the rug. We dug a hole and crafted a door with a latch so I can go beneathe here and sip tea with the shadows. And you continue to shovel dirt unto my head and you point at the lights. I've seen them before, stop acting so prophetic. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
Stick your head out into the rain, feel how it pours. that is my favorite line, plus the ending rocked...i kind of got my own meaning out of it, and that is really cool. thanks for sharing...it's stupid that no one has replied to this. C'MON PIP! QUIT SLACKIN! bergundy At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
You know how big of a fan I am of your work. This was no exception. Beautiful job. -Kelly You play the song I know. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great writing  Andrew |
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