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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2005-02-18 03:02 PM


You turn your head when I go to speak.
Someone turns and says:
This monument was built on an alleyway and you can see the lights of philadelphia from here.
The window is wide and the teacher performs math in sing song.
Stick your head out into the rain, feel how it pours. We are not in California.
Grass stains on my skin.
We've been rolling down hills in the nude.
We've been brushing my mistakes under the rug.
We dug a hole and crafted a door with a latch
so I can go beneathe here and sip tea with the shadows.
And you continue to shovel dirt unto my head and you point at the lights.    
I've seen them before, stop acting so prophetic.

© Copyright 2005 Alexis Smith - All Rights Reserved
fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
1 posted 2005-02-22 07:07 PM


Stick your head out into the rain, feel how it pours.

that is my favorite line, plus the ending rocked...i kind of got my own meaning out of it, and that is really cool. thanks for sharing...it's stupid that no one has replied to this.  C'MON PIP! QUIT SLACKIN!

bergundy

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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.
2 posted 2005-02-22 08:34 PM



You know how big of a fan I am of your
work. This was no exception.

Beautiful job.

-Kelly

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

Marshalzu
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Lurking
3 posted 2005-03-05 02:45 PM


Great writing

Andrew

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