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Obsolete Junior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 43 |
She spoke last night, told me how frustrated she was Explained how confused she is, She didn't know what to do I didn't even call her mine, much less call her on the phone I said I would work on it, Gave a promise of more effort I'm sure I'll be what I know I am.. (Sooner or later) As soon as I figure out, what is real and what isn't You deserve my all, and I know this But the last time I gave my all, I lost it all |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I used to know someone like this...interesting to get a glimpse of what it must have been like from their point of view. I really enjoyed this. It's so honest and heartwrenching. Great job. Going in my library. -Kristin Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me. |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
i didn't like this pice that much(sorry). ther was a feel i gave me that didn't set right something like setting up for disaster. but keep righting |
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lauren03 Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 64oh, usa |
good write, it sounds kind of confused though, or was it suppost to be like that? interesting because i think a friend of mine is having the same problem. |
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Why Junior Member
since 2003-09-26
Posts 32Middle of nowhere |
that was a nice poem. it wasn't great but it was nice. just a tad bit confusing |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
hmmmmm, then so quick to drift to another. just talking to myself. good write. |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Wow, this was very interesting. I liked it very much. I really liked how you ended it, too. Beautifully done. Nice job. Definitely going in my library. *I figured out that trust was just my one mistake...* |
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