Teen Poetry #7 |
A Girls Mixed Signals |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Geez guys I'm sorry I haven't been here too much to respond to yours lately, things are going crazy right now.Well I just wrote this, let me know what you think! Listen to the tone in my voice, But look into my eyes. What you might find is how much my heart cries. When I say leave me alone, I’m asking you to follow, Cause if you were to leave me, My heart would be so hollow. I might tell you not to call me, That I just need my time, Soon I’ll be running back, cause you’re still on my mind. When I say I don’t need you, I’m asking you to be there. I may not admit it to you, But it means the world that you care. When I say I’m fine, I’m ok, I’m crying out for you, I’m asking you to be there To assure me I’ll make it through. When I talk about other guys, I’m trying to see your reaction, Knowing you care enough to be mad shows me your attraction. I might say I don’t miss you, But you’re always on my mind. As the clock ticks one second longer, An escape from you I can’t find. I might appear over you now, But the truth is I’m just scared, With all these mixed signals I’m just asking you to be there. -Erin AIM-blueyed angel940 One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life. |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
I can't believe no one else has responded to this yet, very good work here, powerful contradictions being expressed here, I really enjoyed this. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
understood this well done! |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
omg... i was doing this exact same thing today..... lol... well written and definitly hitting the nail on the head as they say for meanings here... well written and going into my library... keep posting Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I think you should pass this out in brochure form to guys, then maybe we would get the responses we are looking for. Is it really that hard to figure out? Nice write, thanks for sharing. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
"When I say leave me alone, I’m asking you to follow, Cause if you were to leave me, My heart would be so hollow. When I say I’m fine, I’m ok, I’m crying out for you, I’m asking you to be there To assure me I’ll make it through." Those are my favorite stanzas, very awesome job on this one. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is a really good write and is definitely a must read for all boys and men, maybe now I’m an inch closer to understanding. I really enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing it with us. Andrew |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very nice indeed Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
quote: A few months ago, this would have been me. Now, I'm stuck somewhere between moving on and being trapped. I think I like this one even better than the last one I just reviewed. You've always been a wonderful poet in my eyes and this just show's how right I am. -Rich "I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless" |
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