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AllyKat
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since 2005-01-30
Posts 73
jeffersonville,in
0 posted 2005-02-02 08:51 PM

The Darkness in my heart is
Pleading for your name.
The Darkness in my soul is
Pleading for your love.
The Darkness in my heart is
Pleading for you.
The Darkness in my sould is just
Pleading for your very touch,
The only loveing touch of your hands.
Its just pleading for you.

                   ~~~~~AllyKat

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TheGirlNoOneKnew
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since 2003-12-04
Posts 92
PA, USA
1 posted 2005-02-03 11:52 AM

I thought this was very sweet. I just wanted to point out a few things really quick. =)

This one if probably a typo but sould should be "soul". Loveing should be "loving" and the its in the last line should be "It's."

Sorry, I'm such a grammar freak.
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