Teen Poetry #7 |
Trapped In Time |
Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Lost long ago, When there was nothing, Except the pain. My thoughts are my sins. Even when I tried to cage them, My mind would still let them run free. Free to torture and plague me, From morning to night. Whirling in the dream, You turn your head to look at me, The sadness in your eyes, Is almost too much. Please don’t look at me like that. Your eyes are too beautiful to have tears. Everything about you…is beautiful… And I’m sorry. Alive, but not awake, My reserves are exhausted. Too much stress, I just want to hold you, And make everything….go away. But life is life, And time seems frozen, ‘Cuz you’re not here, And I lay here trapped, Just trying to deal. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether "I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
All your words always leave me with a lasting impression on the emotions you're going through. I loved this. -Kelly You play the song I know. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Thanks, I'm glad you liked this. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
hmmm. I feel you. this hit me square in the heart |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
I especially like the line that says " My thoughts are my sins " because it's true. The whole poem was great though. You always write great poems. |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I loved everything about this, especially the middle stanza. You are very good at sharing not only words, but feelings. Keep it up. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Thanks again everyone. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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