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feeling like your mother...
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feeling like your mother... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
You sit at the piano and grab me suddenly by the waist hugging the breath out of me and resting your head on my chest. I always feel like your mother when you do that and I know by now you are listening to my heart. I hope the rythum can help you write a song, its bound to be dancable the way my heart pounds at your touch. You wear your glasses but don't act tired I remember last winter and it's coming back around to that dear. You told me winter is the climax as the story declines can I please stand at your side? We can't very well escape each other You sit at the piano and I touch your face with a hand crafted by this clear january sky. Could it be you looked frightened I used to sing here in this room every other day... I'm only wishing I could sing you to sleep. I don't want to feel like your mother anymore so release me and come to me again... |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was good. My favorite line was - "We can't very well escape each other" I know that feeling...Well done. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
"and I know by now you are listening to my heart. I hope the rythum can help you write a song," ahh i love that part |
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Jezzika Member
since 2005-01-05
Posts 154work |
Wow this was really good  I really liked it...  Jezzika you know he really wants me |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
i liked this, i don't know my favorite line...more like i enjoyed the entire piece. well done bergundy At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio |
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