Teen Poetry #7 |
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Seconds Bit It's Lip |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN ![]() |
Seconds Bit It's Lip I am living in this coffin nearly knocking on the wood. Of cruel Earth! Can you keep me down? I have built this home inside you so I may have a partner in my groanings. Weakness has sunk my eyes into my thoughts and sorrow pumps through my chest. "Let him bleed." The said. Maybe they were right, Oh what a routine this has become. p.s. check out my music at www.purevolume.com/aprilsfalling |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I liked the mood of this one, and the end was especially strong. Keep writing. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks for reading it. |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
A saddening mood to this one.... almost regretful. Either way i enjoyed this one and i also enjoyed listening to Leave Hell Alone (i think that's t he one). Keep up the great work. -John nice use of muffin |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks for listening and reading. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
i liked the sky is too long, couldn't really hear the other one. good poem, i like the style. laura you're the only one keeping me alive |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks |
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