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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2005-01-17 09:19 PM

and my heart pounds for nothing.
just another heartbreak to
add to our party mix.
come and sway to the music and
watch me fall
down in the midst of it all.
promises never made him too sorry,
wiping it all away with his
heart on his sleeve.

wondering what we believe is really
the truth,
does anyone know in the heat of it
all who our
hearts really belong to?
you were the one who dragged me
along for so long,
my eyes covered with lust and
shedding
attention like star dust. we failed,
didn’t we.

maybe it’s worse than we thought. i
don’t think heartbreak
has ever tasted this good.
and we roll our eyes like there’s no
affect from our
thoughts of those long summer nights
but we know
so much better than to say we're
alright.

for by now we should know that love
can only be temporary,
and soul mates can only be drawn
in ink.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2005-01-18 05:53 PM

good title. the whole poem seemed like lines that i had heard in songs though.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2005-01-19 12:44 PM

I love this. its like one great line ontop of another. I liked this part:
and we roll our eyes like there’s no
affect from our
thoughts of those long summer nights
but we know
so much better than to say we're
alright.

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

3 posted 2005-02-14 02:18 AM

Well put together. Good..very good

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

4 posted 2005-02-14 02:25 AM

"
for by now we should know that love
can only be temporary,
and soul mates can only be drawn
in ink.
"
wow it was excellent thanks so much for sharing

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2005-02-18 07:23 PM

I loved the last two stanzas, this was awesome! I'm putting this in my library, I'm surprised more people haven't replied to this.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2005-02-21 03:10 PM

I really love this alot. The fist stanza was one of my favorites, and I love the line "but we know so much better than to say we're alright."
Excellent piece, the imagery was wonderful as well.
Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

7 posted 2005-03-31 09:44 AM

brilliant title, and the poem was good too

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

8 posted 2005-04-01 02:36 AM

I love the title. I was kind of expecting more, after reading such an amazing title, but the poem was pretty good. Sounds very lyrical though, like a song.

StarryEyed3
Member

since 2005-06-26

Posts 58
bostonia

9 posted 2005-06-27 10:33 PM

this is my favorite of your poems so far- it breaks my heart a little every time i read it, especially the last 2 lines.

"does anyone know in the heat of it
all who our
hearts really belong to?"

mm... i love it

can't wait to read more

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