Teen Poetry #7 |
I Told You So |
HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
You are truly pathetic Do you know that? Living just for her Just because she’s “phat” Yet you say you know it’s love But stop and think before you leap “What do I know of love?” before sew what you can’t reap You’ve never had a girlfriend And yet now, “she’s the one” I can already see the end And trust me it’s not fun But no, I’m just jealous I know that’s what you’ll say Yes. Sure. I’m jealous That’s why I walked away. I tell you that I’ve been there, And that it’ll only make you cry But you think I’ve been no where And that all I do is lie So I think I’ll stop Because there’s no helping you You’ve already sewn your crop So you must reap them too Just remember this When you wind up down and low And all I have to say is this “I told you so” ************************************************ Not my best, but I just needed to get that out.I suppose you'd call it a rant poem.Well, read and enjoy, or at least understand. Peace "I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it's very good... I like a good rant...I know how this feels, and sometimes although you really want it to, saying 'I told you so' doesn't feel that great when someone else gets hurt. |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
I liked it, but I've read other of ur work that i liked better... talk to u later. peace!!! "Stand still awhile and dream of the times when your heart felt full." ~Reina Nash~ R.I.P. 9*6*04 You'll always be remembered, I love you! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I like rant poems (I sure write alot of them ^_^)..just good to get your feelings out...lol. Good write! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is good rich.... i like it and know how oyu feel and wat you mean... rant poems can be the best ones sometimes... i agree i have read better but this is still very good.. Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I can relate, having been on the side of the one hearing the "I told you so." This one is going to the library, good write. |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Very good Rich, I loved this, prolly cause it's something I wish I could say to my friend. I'm in the exact position of this poem and that's why I love it cause you wrote it very well and I could relate to every line. Great job!!! Erin AIM-blueyed angel940 |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Sewing what you reap, classic. I like the way you used it here. Ranting poems really help don't they? Just because this one is a rant it doesn't make it any less of a good poem. As always, I love this. If I could fall asleep tonight |
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