cold beliefs of who i should be.

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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2004-12-06 06:38 PM

they keep breaking me down;
wearing me thin like the cold
substance of the white sheets
against flurry dreams.

and maybe it’s just the fact
that i can’t seem to sew back
together all my broken dreams,
leaving behind the girl with the
pretty eyes who once

believed.

it’s like the stars are forcing me
to make a wish and fall,

fall so hard,

over another night of tired
conversations on the things that
i should be. not who i am. never
who i am.

and, just maybe if you could stop
making me so lonely. you would
be able to see how faded my scars
have become.

the only thing is, you wouldn’t
be able to see how they’re still
shining, still hurting.

pulsing rapidly,

on the inside.

remember to breathe after you exhale.

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

1 posted 2004-12-06 07:20 PM

you shouldnt have to be anyone other than who you are. as for those scars, they may never heal, but you may learn from them, and they will make you stronger

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

2 posted 2004-12-06 07:54 PM

Let the scars be a reminder that if you could survive a pain so deep, you are strong enough to survive anything. Good write, thank you for sharing.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2004-12-07 09:25 AM

Well, first off, reading this poem while listening to Green Day's, "Boulevard Of Broken Dreams," is a very creepy experience! It really is a great poem, and so relevant to real life. Everyone always seems to never see who you are, only that you aren't who they want you to be. I've experienced that too many times. I'd say more, but between Savage's reply and Papa Roach's, "Scars," I think they've got it all covered. (^.-) P34c3!
-Rich

Winamp Is Playing:
"Boulevard Of Broken Dreams"
Green Day
American Idiot

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
~Take Me~ Papa Roach

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

4 posted 2004-12-07 11:47 AM

Good work. ~Jess

"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-12-07 04:06 PM

"the only thing is, you wouldn’t
be able to see how they’re still
shining, still hurting.

pulsing rapidly,

on the inside."

Wow...that ending part was sad. This poem is amazing...thank you for sharing.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

6 posted 2004-12-11 05:22 PM

I like this part:
they keep breaking me down;
wearing me thin like the cold

I enjoy your writing much...

There's no reason I'm oversleeping
dreamin' my life away...

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