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Teen Poetry #7

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red_angel*16
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since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

0 posted 2004-12-02 05:51 AM

I stare at you from a crowd
watching and checking you out
wondering if i could ever be yours
so please open your eyes and see

I see you at school with your crew
I try everything to make you notice me
wonderingif you know I really exist,
but sometimes i feel as if I'm invisible to you

I could be cool, i could be nice
I could be really funny sometimes,
but sometimes I could act like a fool
so com'mon give my love a try

I wanna be happy, I wanna be yours
I wanna know how being in love feels
but thats only possible
if you just give me chance...

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-12-02 10:41 PM

"I wanna be happy, I wanna be yours
I wanna know how being in love feels
but thats only possible
if you just give me chance..."

I can relate to this poem so much too. Great write...I would just go back and edit and fix a couple spelling errors and stuff.

This poem is going in my library too!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

2 posted 2004-12-04 04:36 AM

thanks Alli for you comments and reply's

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