Teen Poetry #7 |
Alone and Aching |
Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
My soul is swimming, In this ocean of black. Lost in its waves of darkness, I know I need you back. ‘Cuz without you, The waves pull me down, And there’s no life-guard on duty, To save me if I start to drown. I’m broken again, Torn apart from the inside, By all these sleepless nights, And all the times that I’ve cried. Nothing will be able to stop it, Until you’re back with me again, My heart aches for you alone, To please just stop this pain…. ~*I know this is kinda lame, but I needed to write SOMETHING...I have to try and get out of this writer's block.....*~ "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
no, not lame at all...the flow here is great and such a sad feel to it... |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
NOT LAME! full of emotion... thats what i like to read, and thats what i like about your poetry, it always makes me feel, not just think. write on! |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
*shakes head* that is not lame, I loved it. It had a good flow and I'm sure I'm not the only one that could relate alittle to well to this one(good thing for you lol) great job! Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
They've already said it - it's not lame! lol...it's actually an awesome write Staci. Keep Posting! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Thanks everyone, I'm glad you liked this...I didn't think to highly of it, but it's cool that you did. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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