the friendly hello - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #7

the friendly hello

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

0 posted 2004-12-01 07:39 AM

you light up my eyes
with that smile
that hug
and that kiss

your style from head to toe
i do adore
and your "kurt Kobain" hair
makes me want to stare

i won't forget the day
the day i passed you away

for now i regret
that i didn't say hello
i didn't get that hug
nor did i get that kiss

i will always dream
about this day
the day i missed
the friendly hello

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
"and we'll all float on ok....." - modest mouse
aim - reklesabandnrckr
groove on sista!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-12-01 06:32 PM

"i will always dream
about this day
the day i missed
the friendly hello"

Sad ending...lol...I thought it might be a happy ending, but I'm wrong...

Anyways, good write. Some of the rhymes sound alittle forced, but nothing to worry about.

Enjoyed~

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2004-12-02 12:46 PM

thanks hun. well nothing forced just thought of in a different style.

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
"and we'll all float on ok....." - modest mouse
aim - reklesabandnrckr
groove on sista!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.