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Forget him... |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
sorry I havent written for so long, I had a mental block and I couldnt think of anything, then sumthing popped up so here it is. its not done yet so tell me wat you think about it forgetget..... forget his face forget his name forget that he was ever in your life, forget his love and warm embrace forget his oh so beautiful face, forget all the memories you've had with him forget his soft and gental heart forget the times when he made you laugh forget all the times when you were together forget all the love that you two shared forget every single day you've spent with him and remember the times he made you cry please tell me what you think |
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SarBear Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 205Massachusetts |
I really like it-and I know its meaning. Perfectly explains that feeling when all you want to do is forget about it but something won't let you. And you want to try to remember that it wasn't just great times-but he was bad too. Yes anyways-It's really good keep it up. |
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WranglrButts9 Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108Iowa, US |
Very good. Sometimes its easier to forget all the fun times you had with someone and remember the bad to help you forget the good. (If that made sense, lol).... I liked it! Bailey Good judgment comes from experience, |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
i really liked this. now, if only it was that easy to forget him! keep writing. -kelly remember to breathe after you exhale. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Like this...kinda repetitive with all the "forget his" lines, but I still enjoyed the poem. One other thing, in the beginning it says, "forgetget". Was that done intentionally? I bet it was, but I can be kinda slow sometimes so what did it mean? lol.  Anyways, like I said, nice job.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
thanks for your reply's you guy's and Alli the part that said "forgetget" it was supposed to say "forget him" so i guess I typed it wrong so thanks for pointing that out for me!!! |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
remember how he left one day remember how he slammed the door remember how he left you sore remember how they shared that kiss remember how he left for his other 'miss' remember how his "I love you" was a lie remember how he left you to die remember that you can forever walk away knowing the sun will shine again someday. Sorry! Couldn't help myself! just sorta popped in my head! Took my sittuation and twisted it to a female pov, and found this easy to write! Hope I don't offend you, but if I did, let me know, and I'll have a moderator remove this reply ASAP! Consider this a tribute to your short, but oh-so-true, poem!  -Rich Winamp Is Playing: "Digital Love" Daft Punk Discovery "I'm burning in the heavens, |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
If only it were that easy. Thanks for sharing. |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
uhhhh... i forgot what i was gonna say. |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
thanks for dacomments and ya.... i like that little poem you did romantic guy i'm not quite finish with it so I'm gonna use your ending if you dont mind and dream child ur so 4getful ( just joking ) lol. always christine |
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