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earthdust
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0 posted 2004-11-13 11:14 PM



fly high little sparrow
with the pretty blue eyes
as high as the sun
that's set in the skies

gracefully soar
in your passionate way
amongst beautiful clouds
that watch over the day

you're free
and you're wild
liberty's child

then comes the winds

fly little sparrow
as fast as you can
hurry and flee
from the ravaging winds

seek out your shelter
from the thunder and rain
hide from the storm
that brings in the pain

back to your cubby
back to your den
never get caught
in the stormclouds again

rest in the emptiness
find comfort alone
behind the cold bars
safe in your home

rest little sparrow
alone in your cage
safe from the chaos
of the storms violent rage

sleep little sparrow
dusk will come soon
then twinkles the stars
then glimmers the moon

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

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1 posted 2004-11-14 09:19 PM


I liked this poem.

I liked the last two stanzas the most, though.
For some reason the ending of this little sparrow's journey appealed to me.

Very good word. Keep them coming

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2 posted 2004-11-15 08:30 AM


This is a very charming little poem. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Andrew

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3 posted 2004-11-15 06:12 PM


Love this! Very much enjoyed!

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4 posted 2004-11-15 09:26 PM


I liked "fly little sparrow" because it specifically outlined the journey. Good Write Smile
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5 posted 2004-11-16 11:53 AM


i liked the last lil part. was very well done. thanks for sharing.
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