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Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

0 posted 2003-09-24 02:34 AM

Someday
long after the covers have shut out the cold
and the curtains have shut out the world,
she'll turn to you in a sleepy daze,
forgetting that her heart isn't comfortable
on her sleeve.

Half asleep,
she's twice as honest.
Half asleep,
she's wide awake.

She'll wrap her arms around you,
too tired to care if she's keeping you up.
She'll say you weren't what she expected,
just a thousand times more wonderful.
She'll whisper in your ear
everything that she's too scared to say out loud.
She'll paint you a picture
of the lifetime she'd gladly spend in your arms.
She'll drift off
only after making sure the last thing you hear is
"I love you..."

And you'll know
that nothing about this is ordinary.

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

1 posted 2003-09-24 08:59 AM

Oh my goodness...this is honestly a very sensative and touching piece of poetry, you captured an intimate moment with great clarity and I'm sure the vivid scene you create here will ring true with many who read it,i really did enjoy this very much, sorry if I gushed a bit here but hey well done!
Anya

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

2 posted 2003-09-24 04:26 PM

OH MY GOSH!!!! This was one of the sweetest poems I have EVER read in my entire life! I absolutely LOVE it!!! Wow...This is going in my library! GREAT WORK! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2003-09-24 10:29 PM

very nicely written, it was an awsome poem. the words were very true to my heart. i felt everything about it. great job!!

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

4 posted 2003-09-25 12:50 PM

Thank you guys so much. It really means a lot to me.
- Kristin

Toasty
Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin

5 posted 2003-09-25 01:51 PM

This is absolutely... wonderful! I LOVE IT!
I can't wait to read more of your stuff.
Excellent, simply excellent. It's going into my personal library.

~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales.

PouringJewels
Member

since 2003-09-18

Posts 158
Maryland

6 posted 2003-09-25 09:45 PM

Omg, great! The words truely capture a great feeling..wonderufl
<3

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

7 posted 2003-09-26 01:35 PM

this was grate i loved reading it. the picture i got was just vivid in my mind. keep righting

Why
Junior Member

since 2003-09-26

Posts 32
Middle of nowhere

8 posted 2003-09-27 05:49 PM

WOW!!!!! That was so awesome!!! Beautiful!!!

Poems free us and trap us all the same.
But still they put our hearts at ease.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

9 posted 2003-09-27 09:23 PM

this was just a great great poem...amazing...i loved the title..it was just..wow!

loved the poem in whole..just amazing stuff here!

riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

greco
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 85
buffalo ny

10 posted 2003-09-28 10:21 PM

very beautiful poem thanks for sharing

greco
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 85
buffalo ny

11 posted 2003-09-28 10:21 PM

very beautiful poem thanks for sharing

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

12 posted 2003-09-28 10:47 PM

this poem seemed so sincere and honest and i loved it. it just had this..real feel. i especially enjoyed the lines:
"Half asleep,
she's twice as honest
Half asleep,
she's wide awake."

Great job on this one.

shara
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 69
florida/USA

13 posted 2003-09-30 10:51 AM

I can honestly say that as i read this peice, i pictured everything happening in my mind, the picture you painted is so clear. I absolutely loved it, it is so full of raw emotion and sencerity, thanks for the great read.

sha-sha

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

14 posted 2003-09-30 04:58 PM

wow very good work!! It totally touched me as it has many other people on this site. I loved your ending when you said "And you'll know that nothing about this is ordinary"
that was a perfect strong ending. GREAT WORK!

Ashley

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

15 posted 2003-10-01 02:59 AM

Wow...you guys...
I can't thank you enough for all your kind words and encouragement. I am so moved by all of you.
From the bottom of my heart...thank you
-Kristin

Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me.
So call me Captain Backfire.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

16 posted 2003-10-02 06:50 AM

This was great! Can't wait to see more.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

17 posted 2003-10-02 08:21 AM

This was a very beatiful poem Kandi...I'm glad I stumbled across it! I hope to see more of your work...

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

[This message has been edited by BabieDoll (10-02-2003 08:24 AM).]

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

18 posted 2003-10-23 05:30 PM

sniffle...this is beautiful...

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

19 posted 2003-10-24 01:01 AM

Beautiful, amazing poem.
I can't add much to what everyone else has said, but this, in my opinion, is perfect.
Thank you for sharing, Im adding this one to my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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