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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-11-08 11:54 AM



Cascading down my face, the fall of tears has yet to cease.
I look into your eyes, and see the look of utter frustration -
Of not being able to stop this devastatingly intense pain.
It brings me to my knees, and takes my breath away,
As it slowly wins this battle of destruction.

  Never Falling

      Never Letting Go

You abandon me again,
As another wave of terror,
Washes over your mind and spirit.
You try to hide,
But still it hunts you.
Even in the smallest corner of your soul,
It still finds you.

You find me,
Cloaked in sacrifice and sin,
Trembling and lying in vast scarlet pool of sorrow.
You look down upon me and say-
“Why do you still weep?”
My only reply-
“My heart shall not stop bleeding,
My tears shall not stop falling,
Until I have my love, you, back in my arms.”


Your soul starts to fade,
As you softly whisper back to me-
“I am truly sorry…I never meant to hurt you….”

I try to grasp your hand as you drift away,
But just slips through mine.
I hope your heard me when I screamed -

“I NEVER WANTED AN APOLOGY….I only wanted you…”


"I tried so hard...But in the end...It doesn't even matter...."~Linkin Park

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
1 posted 2004-11-10 04:19 PM


I can't believe this hasn't gotten replies yet!
Another great piece from you. The emotions were so raw and clear. And as always, it was very descriptive. I especially love the ending. And the line, "You look down upon me and say-
“Why do you still weep?”
Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library.


But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-11-10 05:04 PM


omg! how did i miss this... !!!

lol...this left me speechless...just an amazing write...i'm at a loss of words here.
Keep posting!

~Alli~

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kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
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3 posted 2004-11-10 07:51 PM


wow, this was really sad...it almost made me cry..   

Keep posting...i love ur poems soo much.

Kissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2004-11-11 10:24 AM


Thanks everyone, I'm glad you liked this.

"I tried so hard...But in the end...It doesn't even matter...."~Linkin Park

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

earthdust
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 53
predestined and foreknown
5 posted 2004-11-12 02:12 AM


great work....

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

ShadyMakaveli
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since 2002-08-21
Posts 128

6 posted 2004-11-12 09:05 PM


very well done
I_dont_know_me
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since 2003-12-08
Posts 48
UK, Cymru
7 posted 2004-11-13 05:06 AM



I try to grasp your hand as you drift away,
But just slips through mine.
I hope your heard me when I screamed -

“I NEVER WANTED AN APOLOGY….I only wanted you…”

wow your whole poem was awesome but this was just.... wow!
*Emma*

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