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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2004-10-28 11:19 AM

I’m ready to move on;
Grow up and make my own life.
My history is shameful
( if I could take it back, I would )
Never wanted regrets,
But I have a million and one.
It’s time to pack my things
And leave my past behind.
I can’t forgive the ones who hurt me
( especially myself )
And staying around will slowly kill me
( sometimes I wish it would )
I want to start anew;
Meet new people and make my future.
I can’t sit around and watch anymore!
It’s time for a clean slate.
Leave all my memories behind
( nothing is worth remembering )
I’m done crying…
So wish me luck as I go
( I’ll need it )
And don’t plan on a letter or call,
‘Cause once I’m gone, I’m gone forever
I refuse to look back as I walk
( I don't need to make another mistake )*

**Haha...I'm posting 2 since I haven't posted in a while.**

There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2004-10-28 12:29 PM

I really enjoyed this poem alot. It's upbeat but at the same time shows some of the pain that still lingers.
I especially love the line, "And staying around will slowly kill me
( sometimes I wish it would )"
Moving on is not easy, good for you

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2004-10-28 06:33 PM

Nice writing though I was a little distracted by the circular brackets, whilst I like that particular device I feel that the contents have really got to wow me, it's got to be a really special reflection otherwise It just doesn't work, that's just my opinion though. Still great work, thanks for sharing

Andrew

WranglrButts9
Member

since 2004-10-24

Posts 108
Iowa, US

3 posted 2004-10-28 06:51 PM

I really liked this! I can really relate. Though I agree with Andrew, the parenthisis (I don't know how to spell it) do get a little distracting!

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-10-28 10:41 PM

Loved this...it's like a simple kind of poem, but there is so much emotion and thought in it, and that's what I think makes it so good. I, too, can relate.

Thanks for sharing!

~Alli~

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HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

5 posted 2004-11-01 10:03 PM

Heh. I can relate to this poem exactly. I wish I had that kind of inner strength to get up and move on from this stage of my life. I liked this poem more tham most because it meshed with my life so close, so I guess I'm biased, but it's still really good. Just what I needed to read tonight. Kudos!

-Rich

Winamp is Playing:
"Haunted"
Evanesence
Fallen

Part of knowing where I'm going
is knowing where I've been
~Rich~

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

6 posted 2004-11-13 12:23 PM

good job. i can honestly relate. i like this!

Freedom is the dream of sleeping reality.
~DreamChild~

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