shake me, boy.Shake me senseless.

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Teen Poetry #7

shake me, boy.Shake me senseless.

Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-10-19 10:25 PM

This is what journal entries are made of.

But I can't write out why the past two days have been.

Mind altering.

Him
he
Them
Us
I'm amazed and hearts flutter.

And words spill out like fire.
Yet I'm still wondering....
Why?
Why is it that thing happens in this sort of twisted finger pointing laughing.
I can't catch a break.

But I catch them all the time.
I want some to drown in red.
I want the things we talk about to happen.

And I want our lives to turn out like a novel you'lll never forget.

You've invaded my mind, Boy.
And I never want you out.

I believe that lovers should be chained together thrown into a fire with their songs and letters...and left there to burn left there to burn in their

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-10-19 11:08 PM

"You've invaded my mind, Boy.
And I never want you out."

sounds familiar...hmm...j/k

awesome poem, and congrats Persephone on the two year anniversary.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

2 posted 2004-10-20 04:56 AM

this is an awesome poem
cant wait to read more of your work
great job keep writing !

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-10-20 09:57 AM

I love this, such fresh writing.

Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

4 posted 2004-10-20 09:11 PM

Thank you so much,most was based on stuff my boyfriend wrote for me and i added on to and cahnged a bit.
<3
Persephone

I choose my company by the beating of their hearts

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2004-10-25 04:53 PM

But I catch them all the time.
I want some to drown in red.
I want the things we talk about to happen.

I loved this part.

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

6 posted 2004-10-25 05:14 PM

Upon reading this I have realized you have formed somewhat of your own style of writting.

I read through this, to realize that its a wonderful piece. You put words together in strange ways and express yourself well.

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