Teen Poetry #7 |
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I'll think of you |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
I'll think of you when the day is long I'll think of you when the day is gone I'll think of you and maybe you'll be there I'll think of you just because I care I'll think of you and one things true I hope that you'll think of me to ! |
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dodge_chick2003 Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136California |
OK I like this poem but its something I would expect from a new member. You need to try and use bigger words and the ending well the ending kind of reminded me of something a 7th grader would use. Keep Trying. |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
It seemed like a simple poem to me. Like Dodge_chick said, you could try to use bigger words, but I don't know, your choice. I don't see this as a big masterpiece or anything; I see it more as a simple, but expressive write. Anyways, thanks for sharing! I can't wait to read more. ![]() ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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red_angel*16 Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 71 |
I guess your right dodge_chick it is simple but I am a 7th grader I'm a young writer. well thanks 4 your replys |
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sim0riah Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 253Wyoming USA |
Simple sometimes is the best way to express things..Overwriting can get people lost and confused..I think this is clean cut and to the point and very good sim0riah Only at night you can see the depth of the sun |
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