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TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

0 posted 2004-09-03 04:22 PM

Simple thoughts run across this simple mind
like the way this pen connects to paper,
it's late at night and your in my heart again
and there is no happiness that I can find.

Tender flashbacks habit inside my head,
of our lips meeting in first love's bliss
yes, you and I are were beautiful back then
I lived my life around the pretty words you said.

No one stopping us, we were free to fly
free to escape from the horrors around us
and I held onto your jacket so tightly,
biting my lip and trying not to cry.

Because the future was so unsteady
I was on one side, you on the other
and when I tried to reach for your hand
I could tell then that you weren't ready.

So we seperated dream from reality,
and I said goodbye to everything I knew
regrets now lay on the tip of my tongue
and I wonder if you ever think about me.

And when simple thoughts run through this simple mind
like the way this pen is writing your name tonight,
I'll cherish the mistake I made in loving you
and see what happiness is left to find.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-09-03 05:18 PM

I'm crying as i read this, because i have the same problem...

Sorry if i didnt totally get the whole poem. It was kind of blurry. I think i got most of it though.

The ending was my favorite.

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

2 posted 2004-09-04 12:08 PM

wow awesome, it made me cry cause tha'ts exactly how I feel right now, u can look at my other poem and tell. Wow amazing, awesome job.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

TheBrokenSilence
New Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 3
CA, United States

3 posted 2004-09-04 03:34 AM

its very good. i liked it a lot because i used to be able to relate to it so much.

AtLsHawTy17
Member

since 2004-09-07

Posts 60
IL,

4 posted 2004-09-07 11:07 PM

that was really good i like maybe i just am dumb but i liked how you rhymed the last word of the first sentence and the last word of the last sentence wow good poem love it

Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

5 posted 2004-09-09 10:05 PM

^^ Thanks hun. And you're not dumb at all, you were right about what you saw in the poem. I did rhyme the first and last line in each stanza.