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Teen Poetry #7

under the fears

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2004-08-10 09:29 PM

she lies there
underneath the stars
praying that it rains
to disguise her tears
hide her pain
somewhere inbetween the drops
so they may grace her lips
make them shimmer
with the innocence she wished she'd lost
her screams cannot be heard
gripping the air
to hold on
for just one more minute
so she won't die just yet
in her hands she has a picture
been worn out by forever
she falls into nothing
as the rain washes away
the last few lines
of his face

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2004-08-11 07:45 PM

Wow. This is so powerful! I love this, so much. It really touched me, not one line was out of place.
I especially love the end.
Thanks for sharing. This is going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2004-08-11 07:55 PM

oh, this was so sad...

I loved it...at first i wasnt sure about it, in the beggining, but it turned out to be a beautiful write.

The ending was what did it for me, i think.

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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