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davidmerriman Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123Dallas, TX |
Floating tensions, ego swapping, Feeding, swimming carnivorous Words and little subtle actions Drift along the thick kitchen air. They’re just sitting there, eating like robots Powered by some consuming emotion. Their levels of thought do not overlap, Their realities dripping different ink. I wish for once I could seep in their souls And share with them this new understanding. I wish I could reach out and hold the world, And have its mangled arms to hold me back. It’s just an experience, I’d tell them, All just different things that are happening. And I’d smile and they’d smile -— so happy! —- The tensions loosening around my skull. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
They’re just sitting there, eating like robots Powered by some consuming emotion. Their levels of thought do not overlap, Their realities dripping different ink. Eenjoyed your descriptive relationship.I could picture your parents sitting there. M |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
this was REALLY good why dehell does this only have one reply! but hey, nakedthoughts was the one, meaning this is great! She knows a good poem when she sees one  superb man, this had some power to it! Kudos, and more!!!!! I left my wallet in El Segundo... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
no kidding... this is awesome  |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow.... ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
this is truely well crafted. I enjoyed it immensely. and can relate to that robot type feeling all around me. |
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