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Teen Poetry #7

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HeroicVillan
Junior Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2004-07-19 12:26 PM

we can not seem
to find a place
set adrift
lost in space
a speck as small
as a drop of rain
dreamed importance
seems all so vain
in a space so shattered
what can we mean
the theater of fake
players of the scene

Each of us is the sum of our scars...

Stepharoo
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

1 posted 2004-07-20 12:55 PM

This really confused me, but then again it didnt. I dont know what else to say.
Keep it up.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-08-02 08:29 PM

Hmm James....I'm going to have to say that this confused me too.

Just keep writing and working at it!

~Alli~

I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2004-08-03 05:58 PM

i understood what it meant. i actually thought that it was close to being obvious in some spots. you wrote well though. i think that it may have sounded better without the rhyming. good work anyway.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-08-03 11:14 PM

the theater of fake
players of the scene
I loved the ending, made it for me. nice.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

5 posted 2004-08-04 08:43 PM

The ending was the best...I understood it perfectly. I cant see how people can be confused? Either way though, it was an amazing write...

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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