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Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-07-09 02:39 PM

i love you because ...

of how your lips are as soft as

rose petals when you kiss me

because ...

your touch is sootthing like a warm

afternoon breeze ; gentle and flawless

because ...

the warmth i get when im with

you is like the sand after a long summer day

because ...

the feeling within is as beautiful as the

night sky just moments after the sun sets

and the stars come out

because ...

your sweet smell is like a heaven that i can

never touch but can make me fly with the

wings of an angle

because ...

i see nothing but you and me when i

look into your eyes ; the ever-deepining glow in

them seems to be cradled with affection

because ...

it's as magickal as faery dust, yet as

simple as a rose bud; fresh, blossoming, new

because ...

you can tell its true

because ...

its when im with you and only you i am

as radiant as the sun

spellcasting as the moon

and you still love me even if i am simple

like a rose

because ...

you dont make me feel simple ... i feel like a goddess

so i sweetly whisper to you with words

slowly tumbling out of my lips in a pace of

a lulaby that all i need in this world is

the sun, moon, you and i

thats why i love you

I hope your sleeping good at nights....
Knowing I never sleep at all

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-07-10 11:16 PM

I was just skimming thorough the poetry forums, and the title of this poem really caught my eye.

This poem was beautiful and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing!

~Alli~

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-07-11 08:10 PM

Im surprised this hasn't gotten more replies. I love this so much, very amazing, heartfelt piece.
Your words created a soft tone and picture.
Beautiful, thank you for sharing.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2004-07-11 09:15 PM

I saw it as cliche, personally.

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

4 posted 2004-07-12 05:57 PM

hey,
eh some things are kind of cliche, but who cares? it really is beautiful =)

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

5 posted 2004-07-12 06:38 PM

I really liked it, awesome imagery, one thing I would watch is were you break your lines. for ex.

the warmth i get when im with

you is like the sand after a long summer day

*this might be easier read if it was *

the wartmth I get when I'm with you

is like the sand after a long summer day.

but awesome job, loved the picture it gave.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

pammy
Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 50
California

6 posted 2004-07-13 02:16 PM

another great one. its apparent how much you care for the person in discussion. like it alot.
pammy

~*Pammy*~
"Scarred from the past, longing for the future,and fearing the present"

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