Teen Poetry #7 |
Lovers Soul, You and Me(Im Waiting Comments!!!) |
Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
that’s a most tough poem I’m going to write its not something easy its not for someone simple its for my lover its for my sense do u feel,do u c, do u know how to describe a soul, a love, and a touch its out of a paper description its out of heart saying or sensing its so tough to done i called a group of muses assist me write nightly on the romantic lights something able to move the feelings, bumping the heart, moving the hand order the hand write may this atmosphere will help!!! passed a minutes all are quiet and silence passed a hours nothing changed passed a ...., the muse of soul is going to write something it said, I’m a human of sense I’m a feelings in a circle figure which twist and make a storm whatever your away i can see you whatever your away i will contain you in the storm a storm of soul, gathering the souls in pair in amazing figure colored in a lovers name no one has seen yet, but a lover's souls are done the names are flight in the sky, and the echo is just hearing two lovers call each other, and the echo becomes in descent order the names of lovers become hearable im hearing here name well Rainbow drew our names on the sun lights dropped with fragrance rise out the muse of feelings wake up of a quiet are feelings moved in rush, saying im the soul pair im the complete for the storm of soul im the feeling of attraction the attraction of soul in a progressive order which shivers your feelings flow in your body like a storm not stopped no barrier it reached the heart in a seconds bumping it on the harmonic sound of love as the soul and feeling became united with a dance on songs made by the feelings and soul muses holding each other on the stage of the heart dancing like a breeze flirt the red flowers easy to move right and left and move around in a circle of storm àmade its name my name and my lover’s name the lovers are going to speak the lights around are going to jerk of his spelling the lips of him going to move and the lights struck i have waited this moment i didn’t need to tell u i need u the soul and the feeling muse, told u what i feel a glisten of eyes brighted as a tears going to fall and the lips of her spelled i love u in a so romantic way the door of heart locked well, and the soul, and feelings still in the lovers are in the heart room and the onlookers are out, the arrow keep as a guard no one allowable to get in the power of love is going to spell, the romance muse it mixed the soul, feeling, and the heart beating in a romance cup, called lover's body the place i have never seen yet maybe because i have never been in love its something mixed, the sky is transparent blue like a ball we are just inside its so amazing, over description the sun lights are like a gold strike our hears to give a glow the breeze was falling drawing our names the palms, trees, flowers, grass and others i have never seen don’t know how to describe, i don’t know their names the palms bend with others like, to just pass the sun lights like arrows of lines and to provide a shadow for a close nest made by a natural the breeze is pumping the balmy mixed with a fragrance rise out of a flowers we were sit on the grass drawing a heart and names already made by natural around i caught her eyes finally as she tries to escape of my sight she looked at me shy but she told me, she needs my touch the stare at each eyes take a time, each one explain what the other need its a silence of love, where there a silent link is done her lips attracted mine by calling them our lips became stuck, with a motion of lips and tongue and my hand rubbing her back in a gentle way the kiss was long something to introduce our selfs and share souls of love she huge me and her face over my shoulder, in a so hard way like asking me, don’t leave me again i clamed her down, and kissed her ear behind just melt her feelings, she pulled her hand in under my shirt warping me moving her hand up and down, with a sense i haven’t known or felt i zipped her dress, but i don’t need to describe about this im sure we feed each other need with a sense im here beside forever just move your lips in a silence or whispering yourself your lover serve u ~~~~I LOVE U~~~~~ [This message has been edited by Rommance_Touch (07-09-2004 08:48 PM).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is an exceptional post i wonder why nobody has even posted a reply yet i applaud you actually, i give you a standing ovation I most definitely enjoyed this read keep it up You don't have to say you love me just be close at hand....... |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
tks ACIES but really less ppl Reply me in general dont know why!!! read my previous poem, and sense them,,maybe there is a Grammer mistakes, but are understandable ths Acies 4 u |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Well I have a hard time reading and understanding your poetry, I read it, I just don't understand it. I don't think it's grammar sometimes and others, yes it's grammar. I'm still developing as a writer and maybe your stuff is just harder for me to read right now. I think that's why many don't reply cause they don't understand it. Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
tks tapper798 4 yr reply her and yr caring to reply that,, but really i think if it a hard to undertsand,how could Acies to understand it...i think its clear,,, |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
no problem, well not the grammar on this one, its the words, sometimes the words are so beautiful but I have a hard time putting together what they mean and what the big picture is and what it's completely talking about. But the parts I did understand were beautifuL! |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
tks tapper798 again, but really the problem, im not that native or one speak english im egyptian so my language is arabic, but im trying to do,, maybe someday i can handle it, by support of ppl here...tks 4 all ppl here |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Actually grammer helps with the flow JUju |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Your general intentions were definetly worth praising, but I will agree, it was difficult to read through. I had a hard time finding a rythm. But I don't think you should change it if you're happy. The words and meaning are excellent. What matters is that you like it **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I like this! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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