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Rommance_Touch
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0 posted 2004-07-09 02:42 AM




that’s a most tough poem I’m going to write
its not something easy
its not for someone simple
its for my lover
its for my sense
do u feel,do u c, do u know
how to describe a soul, a love, and a touch
its out of a paper description
its out of heart saying or sensing
its so tough to done
i called a group of muses assist me write
nightly on the romantic lights
something able to move the feelings,
bumping the heart, moving the hand order the hand write
may this atmosphere will help!!!
passed a minutes all are quiet and silence
passed a hours nothing changed
passed a ...., the muse of soul is going to write something
it said, I’m a human of sense
I’m a feelings in a circle figure
which twist and make a storm
whatever your away i can see you
whatever your away i will contain you in the storm
a storm of soul, gathering the souls
in pair in amazing figure
colored in a lovers name
no one has seen yet, but a lover's souls are done
the names are flight in the sky, and the echo is just hearing
two lovers call each other, and the echo becomes in descent order
the names of lovers become hearable
im hearing here name well
Rainbow drew our names on the sun lights
dropped with fragrance rise out
the muse of feelings wake up of a quiet
are feelings moved in rush, saying
im the soul pair
im the complete for the storm of soul
im the feeling of attraction
the attraction of soul
in a progressive order
which shivers your feelings
flow in your body like a storm
not stopped no barrier
it reached the heart in a seconds
bumping it on the harmonic sound of love
as the soul and feeling became united
with a dance on songs made by the feelings and soul muses
holding each other on the stage of the heart
dancing like a breeze flirt the red flowers
easy to move right and left
and move around in a circle of storm
àmade its name my name and my lover’s name
the lovers are going to speak
the lights around are going to jerk of his spelling
the lips of him going to move and the lights struck
i have waited this moment
i didn’t need to tell u i need u
the soul and the feeling muse, told u what i feel
a glisten of eyes brighted as a tears going to fall
and the lips of her spelled i love u in a so romantic way
the door of heart locked well, and the soul, and feelings still in
the lovers are in the heart room
and the onlookers are out,
the arrow keep as a guard no one allowable to get in
the power of love is going to spell, the romance muse
it mixed the soul, feeling, and the heart beating
in a romance cup, called lover's body
the place i have never seen yet
maybe because i have never been in love
its something mixed,
the sky is transparent blue like a ball
we are just inside
its so amazing, over description
the sun lights are like a gold
strike our hears to give a glow
the breeze was falling drawing our names
the palms, trees, flowers, grass and others i have never seen
don’t know how to describe, i don’t know their names
the palms bend with others like, to just pass the sun lights like arrows of lines
and to provide a shadow for a close nest made by a natural
the breeze is pumping the balmy mixed with a fragrance rise out of a flowers
we were sit on the grass drawing a heart and names
already made by natural around
i caught her eyes finally as she tries to escape of my sight
she looked at me shy
but she told me, she needs my touch
the stare at each eyes take a time,
each one explain what the other need
its a silence of love, where there a silent link is done
her lips attracted mine by calling them
our lips became stuck, with a motion of lips and tongue
and my hand rubbing her back in a gentle way
the kiss was long
something to introduce our selfs
and share souls of love
she huge me and her face over my shoulder, in a so hard way
like asking me, don’t leave me again
i clamed her down, and kissed her ear behind
just melt her feelings, she pulled her hand in under my shirt warping me
moving her hand up and down, with a sense i haven’t known or felt
i zipped her dress,
but i don’t need to describe about this
im sure we feed each other need with a sense
im here beside forever
just move your lips in a silence or whispering yourself
your lover serve u
~~~~I LOVE U~~~~~




[This message has been edited by Rommance_Touch (07-09-2004 08:48 PM).]

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Acies
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1 posted 2004-07-19 03:40 PM


this is an exceptional post
i wonder why nobody has even posted a reply yet
i applaud you
actually, i give you a standing ovation
I most definitely enjoyed this read
keep it up

You don't have to say you love me just be close at hand.......

Rommance_Touch
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2 posted 2004-07-21 11:29 AM


tks ACIES

but really less ppl Reply me in general dont know why!!!

read my previous poem, and sense them,,maybe there is a Grammer mistakes, but are understandable

ths Acies 4 u

tapper798
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3 posted 2004-07-21 03:19 PM


Well I have a hard time reading and understanding your poetry, I read it, I just don't understand it.  I don't think it's grammar sometimes and others, yes it's grammar.  I'm still developing as a writer and maybe your stuff is just harder for me to read right now.  I think that's why many don't reply cause they don't understand it.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

Rommance_Touch
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4 posted 2004-07-21 10:53 PM


tks tapper798 4 yr reply her and yr caring to reply that,, but really i think if it a hard to undertsand,how could Acies to understand it...i think its clear,,,
tapper798
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5 posted 2004-07-21 11:10 PM


no problem, well not the grammar on this one, its the words, sometimes the words are so beautiful but I have a hard time putting together what they mean and what the big picture is and what it's completely talking about. But the parts I did understand were beautifuL!
Rommance_Touch
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6 posted 2004-07-22 09:14 AM


tks tapper798 again, but really the problem, im not that native or one speak english im egyptian so my language is arabic, but im trying to do,, maybe someday i can handle it, by support of ppl here...tks 4 all ppl here

Juju
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7 posted 2004-07-22 11:05 PM


Actually grammer helps with the flow

JUju

DancinQueen
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8 posted 2004-07-24 04:04 PM


Your general intentions were definetly worth praising, but I will agree, it was difficult to read through.  I had a hard time finding a rythm.  But I don't think you should change it if you're happy.  The words and meaning are excellent.  What matters is that you like it   

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

*Alli4000*
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9 posted 2004-12-26 11:37 PM


I like this!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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