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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2004-07-05 03:19 PM

I'm writing in a new journal and wanted to put this at the front of it. I'm not really sure how it is and I'm not sure about the title so if you have any ideas plz let me know!

The Depths of my Thoughts

God gave me a gift,
Of pouring out words like rain,
Writing on my every thought,
My every love and every pain.

From the pen to the paper,
Are words of wisdom and strength,
Ink spilled from the depths of my heart,
Words that are used to such a length.

Words have such a power,
When used in the right way,
Making simple thoughts beautiful
Leaving the mind to wonder away.

Bottled up emotions leave me
When I write what I have thought,
I write so many things, of the
Things that life has taught.

Many may not listen,
Or mock my pains and fears,
But these are the thoughts of my life,
The depths of my soul, the depths of my tears.

-Erin
Let me know what u think

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

1 posted 2004-07-05 07:27 PM

I like this, especially for the journal idea

It's pretty good, nice job. I like the last stanza...

"love is but a song we sing and fear's the way we die"

Star T
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since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

2 posted 2004-07-06 10:54 AM

thats reallly good.and moreso,perfect for the purpose of the journal frontpage.

Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved.

A.L
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since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

3 posted 2004-07-09 01:45 PM

I like the way you write...the words just flow...

I see me frowning in your eyes...
I see the fear in you...
Where no one ever should be...

::From Autumn To Ashes::

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-07-10 11:17 PM

I think that this poem is PERFECT to put in front of your journal . . .

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2004-07-11 01:20 AM

I really like it alot. It is a really good idea to put it on your journal!
The last 2 lines finished it nicely, and were my favorite.
Thanks for sharing.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

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