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Teen Poetry #7

If It's Only For A Moment

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

0 posted 2005-10-03 05:21 PM

And everytime I close my eyes,
I can only see your face...
And it kills me just to blink.
Cause for a moment
you're mine...
At least, until I realize...
You're only in my mind.

be brutal...
<3kerR

I might have messy hair, runny makeup and a tear-steaked face, but at least I know I have loved.

[This message has been edited by CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa (10-03-2005 07:44 PM).]

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

1 posted 2005-10-03 06:19 PM

i like this, short and sweet and the emotion is right to the point. I think 'Blink' or 'blink... for a moment'.. umm, or try to relate a title to whatever inspired you to write.. if you can rememeber, sorry if i'm not much help but i have a little trouble with titles a good bit lol anyway, good read thanks

"Aerials, in the sky,
When you lose small mind,
You free your life."
- System of a Down

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

2 posted 2005-10-03 07:38 PM

thanks so much for replying!

I might have messy hair, runny makeup and a tear-steaked face, but at least I know I have loved.

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

3 posted 2005-10-09 04:03 PM

i just stopped back again to see how the title thing went good title, fits well

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light"
-Dylan Thomas

mysilentsaviour
New Member

since 2005-11-20

Posts 2
California

4 posted 2005-11-20 08:36 PM

WOW Your amazing... im new to this site.. do u post a lot of poems? my email is in my profile its.. [email protected] please email me..

~Near or far you are my light, my silent saviour~

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

5 posted 2005-11-23 07:15 PM

hey i really like this one i love writing short poems they sometimes end up speaking to people more

Laura

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