Teen Poetry #7 |
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peter pan New Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 8never never land |
the shadows of the night have come to take him but the bright light will fight for him the darkness will not win the brightness shall conquer his heart shall show the truth GOD's love shall save him from death but if he dies ,the darkness will flee and the brightness will overcome I AM CANADIAN!! eh? |
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peter pan New Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 8never never land |
hi all i need some advie should i jsut leave it like this or should i add more to it? I AM CANADIAN!! eh? |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
good onnnnnneeeeeeeeee |
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-=Kiff=- Junior Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 16North wales UK |
I don't really know enough to comment as to whether you should add more to your poem, but if I was to write something on those lines I would defiantly be more descriptive. but that’s just my style. I'm sure if it is everything you feel then it is everything it needs to be. The sun never sets on the British empire |
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