Teen Poetry #7 |
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if you want me to stay |
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Baby D Junior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 14 |
if you want me to stay ask me to come with you to a place that no one knows so we can be alone and you can hold me close ask me to come with you and ask me to stay to a place untouched and ask me today ask me to come with you where the romance of the night will always fall and its only me and you behind high stone walls we can gaze at the moon and the stars and no one will kno where we are ask me to come with you so we can be alone in a place untouched in a place unknown ask me to come with you where the romance of the night will always fall and its only you and me behind high stone walls and i promise ill come if you ask me today i promise ill come and if you want me to ill stay [This message has been edited by Baby D (06-07-2004 07:46 AM).] |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
simple words, are clear and easy to get, but there is a comment, since yr talking abt touch and stuff like this u hadnt to use these words: ask me to come with you where darkness never falls its only you and me behind high stone walls A romance touch always likes to be under night fall and u supported my idea by using "Behind high stone walls", u cant hide at the morning even if yr behind a high wall. |
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Baby D Junior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 14 |
yeh thanks romance touch well you can see i have actually edited it now, wat u sed made sense and actually gave me other ideas about what would sound better. i hope you like the change anyway... Dani |
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