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Teen Poetry #7

Bury me deep

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

0 posted 2004-06-05 05:26 AM

This poem is a break from my usual free verse writes so yeah, hope you like it lol.

Standing still amidst all of our dreams
two hearts joined together forever,
but things aren't what they seem.

Holding hands, holding nothing back
leading eachother into the unknown
kissing you till my insides crack.

Indecision plagues us night and day
you follow through, I lag behind
knowing that you can't stay.

Obstacles bury our love in its path
we are now seperated in life
and there is no turning back.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2004-06-05 10:37 PM

I like this alot! It paints a picture. The length is just right too.
Great job, thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2004-06-25 03:44 AM

kissing you till my insides crack

that line was awesome, i really liked this...i get the feeling, and it's nicely written. good job, going in my library.
keep postin
bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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