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I Come Alone
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I Come Alone |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
I come alone All over and open I come alone All over and open I sure don’t get it All those thing I can’t finish You pick up and throw away And I can’t hardly know Exactly what you hold And I can’t hardly know Anything... But maybe I’m just different anyway Between the lines and under the fray Maybe it’ll iron itself for right now But we’ll probably fail in classic cliché I come alone All over and open I come alone All over and open Does it really make sense anyway? Colorful logic falling a little off tune Maybe it’s a bit too soon But I thought I knew I thought knew... |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I'm not sure I understood it at parts. It was good at some parts and at others I was confused on what it said. Anyways, good job, keep writing. "If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!" |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really like this one alot. Especially the repition of the first stanza, and the end. Very heartfelt. Thanks for sharing. W.W. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful! This one is goin' in my library. ~Jess  "Hopeless romantics are only hopeless in the eyes of those who don't believe in romance." -Unknown |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
"Colorful logic falling a little off tune" wow, awesome write. I loved this so much. |
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