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CLOSE MY EYES make me dream....
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CLOSE MY EYES make me dream.... |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
close my eyes make me dream, make me dream of somethingas sweet as your eyes, make me dream of being with you. close my eyes make me dream. make me dream of the wish i did when i was with you.. make me feel the touch that never ends.. close my eyes make me dream. make me dream of thhis wonderful life imsharing with you,,.. in my dreams i see youand in my dreams thats how i met you.,.. i met you face to face but invisble with no touch. i met you soo sweet and kind.. but whats the use ,,your invisible.. make me dream of being the one you want, make me dream like i need you like i need my friend.. make me dream of the dayz i wish i had but never flied... but now promise me to make me dream of the sweet words ,I LOVE YOU TOO.. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
This is probably the best I've read by you. I'm never one to critique, but maybe you can work on getting everything more organized. Your words and meaning behind everything is always good, just work on making it all flow. Nonetheless, good job  **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
lolol..thanks sis i thank you for ur advice i will take it hopefully iw ill be better lovezzzzz |
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Fleur Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103 |
How sweet..... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I totally agree with dancinqueen...This is one of the best poems I've read by you. Great job! ~Alli~ |
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