i wish everything is perfect

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Teen Poetry #7

i wish everything is perfect

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

0 posted 2004-04-26 12:14 PM

i wish everything is perfect,
so i wont think about life.

i wish everything is perfect.
so i wont get sick .

i wish everything is perfect .
so i wont have headches all my life.

i wish everything is perfect .
to not look at the mirror and blame myself.

i wish i am perfect so i can be loved and cared about ,i wish i am perfect sowont make mistakes all my life..

But people say life is soo not real when its perfect and so fake..because you would not see the happiness of life when everything is perfect,you would see everything normal when its nott!!!!!

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i hope you like it..[kinda weird though..i admitt

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-04-26 07:05 AM

I liked it. I feel the exact same way you do, and I'm sure everyone wishes things were perfect.

~Alli~

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-04-26 04:34 PM

not too fond of it sorry. my advice is to never use the word "so" in a poem. also check the grammar.

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