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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Senior prom was not what it was supposed to be but then neither were you. A night that could’ve ended in tears was change by a few hours flirting with desire. (Desire that fire, between two "friends" Saturday night.) Prom night was a illusion built upon what ifs, but you never have been. (Your memory of one night could change this; us, a smile, a laugh and that look.) Looking back on those four years, you've been a part of the background of my life but that night you came to the forefront. (A new path began one night after senior prom, a promise (between friends), and hope for the morning.) Senior prom was not what it was supposed to be but then neither were you. +Okay, the title is a work in progress . . . Any suggestions?+ [This message has been edited by Cinderelly (04-26-2004 01:24 AM).] |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
although a nice write it doesnt seem to flow. you need to work on that... i cant think of anything that i would change the title to. i think it is fine the way it is. keep up the writing Mel so this is me but what do you care about that???? |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
i think i would make the title simplier and just make it prom...or something with just one word because it just seems to fit better to me. i liked the poem..it was different and thats why i liked it. great job -ri- no matter what i'll always love you |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i liked it. i'm not sure why, but i did. hmmm...i don't know why...good work |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
wow gr88 poem keep it upp |
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