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Teen Poetry #7

how can i tell you?

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
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0 posted 2004-04-20 08:39 PM

how can i tell you , i love you??
how can i tell you i need you?

i wish you would understand that its not my choice to love you or leave you.
i left you because i had no choice.

i wanted you to make me breathe
i wanted you to make me smile
i wanted you to make me swim in your ocean of love.

dont you say i left because i did not love you,, i left because i needed some space for a while and i knowim wrong...i know im wrrong for 10000000s oftimes..

but what can i say?
what can i do to make it up ?

i want to say i need you and love you.

butimight be too shy ormaybe i just want to fly..
to fly in a wind full of your love that gives me wings..

so please dont make it hard,,its not my choice..
but you and me are one day are going to be one....

As half of my heartthat keeps beating just from your smile..

so dont leave dont just go away im here ,im here ,,

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-04-21 08:31 PM

The poem was alright for me. You expressed your emotions well but to me the poem didn't really flow well. Anyways, nice write and keep up the good work!

~Alli~

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