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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
Give into sweet surrender Tasting sugar sweet lips Slip around the the glassy edge Diverting shallow sorrow into the cunundrum Deception continues |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
To be frank, I'm not sure what to say about this... I wasn't sure whether to say it's not so good - or whether it's a work of art! This poem shows how talented you are in the way that you can write something quite deep and romantic in an extremely short piece. On the other hand, its being so short makes it difficult to "get into" if you know what I mean. I like it very much though; a very nice mysterious edge to it. "Where paper cuts, and bloody hands, In the middle, they will meet" |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i thought that it was awesome. it was so much deeper than anything else being posted on here. congratulations for writing something worthwhile! please stick to deep stuff. |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
in reply to Ixxi: i'm glad you 'thought twice' about the poem :-). |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
I like the fact that you are succinct in this poem, there is not a word wasted which creates much more of an impact! |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
I agree with what evryones already said...this poem was excellent  http://www.enternexus.com/profile.php?uid=34810 <----Thats all me |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Even though it was short you made your point in - like lxxi said - a mysterious way. Nice job!! ~Alli~ |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
*applause* nicely done, few words...big impact, those are the best. ~Live and Laugh~ The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised. |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
sometimes short poems are the most entrapping... this was definitly a very nicely written short poem  |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
nice! |
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